Extra Credit Blog Student Two

Offer specific and helpful criticism to assist this student.  If your essay was chosen, you already have extra credit for being chosen.

DO NOT REPEAT criticism.

Share an essay on any topic of your choice. It can be one you've already written, one that responds to a different prompt, or one of your own design.

Maximum of 650 words

Here is the link:  https://docs.google.com/document/d/1La7pQk-84bioSjA9Qry35k3rx1WS8bXkdfHSFMeViSs/edit?usp=sharing

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Extra Credit Blog Student One

Offer specific and helpful criticism to assist this student.  If your essay was chosen, you already have extra credit for being chosen.

DO NOT REPEAT criticism.

Question: Essay #2 (Required for all applicants.)

Copy and paste into the address window:

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hsbW7kKZ-cHbf7sK0OCL8dhfKHeaIFkcOnTStaVMSdw/edit?usp=sharing

Research & Tragedy

What is a tragedy?  How does Oedipus as a tragedy compare to your book?  To research about the upcoming film Schindler's List?

*Go on the databases on either Munising Library's website or on the St. Norbert Databases

*Be prepared to cite the database to add strength to your argument or you may disagree with it.

*Answer the question/s and/or create your own argument about:

*Which example of literature has a tragedy that we as modern society can learn from?

*How have other writers/playwrights/screenwriters  used Sophocles (and his work) to model future tragedies from?

*Is Oedipus (or any other main character) truly responsible for what has happened by the end of the play

*Your own argument

For full credit, you MUST have quotations as support of your points, you MUST show reading and avoid online summary info, you MUST respond to a minimum of 2 posts.  Points will be deducted for those students who wait until the last 12-24 hours, for spelling problems, repeating information already stated, confusing responses, attacking classmates verbally, simply agreeing without saying much of anything, or off-topic commentary.  

------Having support from databases may be given additional credit if used well----
DATABASES  REQUIRED FOR THIS BLOG, but your argument will be judged harshly, so be prepared to defend yourself!

**This blog will end at 11:59 a.m. on 10/31.  Remember that starting on the last 12-24 hours prior will result in loss of points since your discussion will be limited.  I prefer you post something by 10/26 since the marking period ends soon!

Minor Characters: Defend Your Leader and HIs/Her Flaws

This will be a practice getting into the voice and into the head of other characters

Try to be about 1/3-1/2 way through the novel before finishing your posts this week.  You may even argue against your own self/using other characters or other novels.

Choose one or more of the following to argue:

*Argue which character is the leader from the perspective of 2 minor characters--post as such and message me the character you are (for example, Lori's dr#5 or epsilon.3)

*As a lesser character, what are the flaws (tragic/hamartia) of your leaders?  How does this impact you as a minor character?

*Is this making your experience a tragedy?  Compare your life to the other minor characters in Oedipus.  Whose experience is worse?  Whose is better?

Please take into considering metaphoric, critical, and.or gender roles in your response (or you may have other ideas).  

For full credit, you MUST have quotations in support of your main point and main post.   You MUST show reading and avoid online summary info, you MUST respond to a minimum of 2 posts from other students (3 posts total).  Points will be deducted for those students who wait until the last 12-24 hours, for spelling problems, repeating information already stated, confusing responses, attacking classmates verbally, simply agreeing without saying much of anything, or off-topic commentary.  

------Having support from databases may be given additional credit if used well----
DATABASES may be used for this blog.  Shortly they will be required in class, so why not start looking up some information about Oedipus, your recent book, or some of the other recent authors we have covered?

**This blog will end at 9 a.m. on 10/19.  Remember that starting on the last 12-24 hours prior will result in loss of points since your discussion will be limited.

Leadership--Your Book and Your Life

Who is a leader?  Can this teach us anything about our leaders today?

*Argue which character/s from both Feed and the choice for your second novel show leadership qualities (or lack thereof)

*You may wish to incorporate if characters may be like our own leaders or leaders in history as part of your response.  You may also compare the characters to yourself and/or make predictions about the new book you are reading.

You may discuss any segment of the novel (including the end of Feed) but try to leave out spoilers in next texts for now.

Please take into considering societal, historical, and.or gender roles in your response (or you may have other ideas).  

For full credit, you MUST have quotations as support of your points, you MUST show reading and avoid online summary info, you MUST respond to a minimum of 2 posts.  Points will be deducted for those students who wait until the last 12-24 hours, for spelling problems, repeating information already stated, confusing responses, attacking classmates verbally, simply agreeing without saying much of anything, or off-topic commentary.  

------Having support from databases may be given additional credit if used well----
DATABASES ARE NOT REQUIRED FOR THIS BLOG, but your argument will be judged harshly, so be prepared to defend yourself!

**This blog will end at 9 a.m. on 10/15.  Remember that starting on the last 12-24 hours prior will result in loss of points since your discussion will be limited.

Extra Credit Blog #2

EXTRA CREDIT BLOG

Read the student drafts (1 and 2) and make useful/helpful commentary to assist a classmate.  The more helpful the commentary, the more possibility of full +5 (for post blogs together)

Students who are chosen have been awarded +2 already--no names.  Due 1/5/2018 by end of school day.

YOU WILL BE REQUIRED TO ID YOURSELF using school email log in, 

or your comments will not receive extra credit.

PLEASE do more than edit.

Help with:

*organization

*strength of argument

*strength of sources

*usage/integration of assigned reading

*adding sources/databases to help

*wording/vocabulary

*structure of APA

*other checklist areas:  https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mELSpMIAem9F91-TYBxTcYdU0ZrYJ-ciUhk17F_Qa7g/edit?usp=sharing

Student B Draft

CCP English

1st Hour

12/21/17

Catcher in the Rye problem solution

A cool moist substance runs down your face as you are striving to reach your goal you set yourself for failure but to only see yourself succeed in the end this substance you achieved after this hard work is sweat. A problem in todays society is lack of work ethic we need more sweat in our country. The country of america is in a deep hole of lack of work ethic such as how refugees are starting to fill in jobs that americans want but to lazy to work. The problem with this problem today is that if we do not stop this lack of work ethic soon we will have so many people getting money from the government because they will have children and they cannot afford food or schooling for them so that's where a lot of our tax money goes. A good way to help stop lacking in the work ethic area is by a couple of steps such as Communicating better, means to talk to them face to face to make them feel valued. Empower them, let them give you suggestion about how you can improve the company better or what would be more efficient. And Provide incentives, give your workers something they can work for besides just money like if they hit a personal goal they should achieve a gift card or if its a really good goal possibly even a paid day off. In the Book Catcher in the Rye Holden Caulfield has an enormous amount of lacking for work ethic. As Holden attended pencey a big school for really smart kids or smarter than the average bear kind of kids, Holden has the ability to pass all hiss classes possibly even get A’s in all of them but Holden chooses not to do any homework or doesn't get involved in class activities. As Holden continued this path at Pencey he soon was noticed that he had to leave the school because he was failing his classes. How will Holden's parents feel about this? “Well...they’ll be pretty irritated about it. They really will, This is about the fourth school i’ve gone to” (Holden,1946, pg 9). But before holden gets kicked out he had work ethic for other people but not himself such as when stratelator wanted Holden to write a paper for him Holden did. When Holden left Pencey he was very lousy with his money i mean lousy to the point where when Holden ran into someone he recently talked to he would offer them a drink or a hot chocolate. Holden met up with an old friend by the name of Sally she was nice and Beautiful as Holden described her but when Holden went to the ice rink with sally Holden couldn't help but want to tell sally that he loved her. Holden soon told Sally that he wanted to go away with her and live in a cabin and get a job to live together in peace. But Holden would say these things but i dont think actually meaning them. Because Holden never had a job at the moment just thinking ahead.

Extra Credit Blog

EXTRA CREDIT BLOG

Read the student drafts (1 and 2) and make useful/helpful commentary to assist a classmate.  The more helpful the commentary, the more possibility of full +5.

Students who are chosen have been awarded +2 already--no names.  Due 1/5/2018 by end of school day.

YOU WILL BE REQUIRED TO ID YOURSELF using school email log in, 

or your comments will not receive extra credit.

PLEASE do more than edit.

Help with:
*organization
*strength of argument
*strength of sources
*usage/integration of assigned reading
*adding sources/databases to help
*wording/vocabulary
*structure of APA
*other checklist areas:  https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mELSpMIAem9F91-TYBxTcYdU0ZrYJ-ciUhk17F_Qa7g/edit?usp=sharing

STUDENT DRAFT 1

One of the substantial problems in America is mental illness, specifically bipolar disorder. “Bipolar disorder, also known as manic-depressive illness, is a brain disorder that causes unusual shifts in mood, energy, activity levels, and the ability to carry out day-to-day tasks.”(NIMH, 2016) On average, 5,890,000 adults in America have been diagnosed with bipolar disorder. This disorder is common during late teens to early twenties. Therapeutic talking, medication, and support from family and friends are all different solutions to the ongoing problem of this mental illness.

Bipolar disorder is a mental illness that causes a person to have “highs” and “lows”, meaning they could have great days, but also have terrible days. During their good days, they feel overly joyful about everything, but on their bad days they can feel erratically depressed. Contemplating suicide goes through their minds during their extreme “lows”. In other words, the go through extreme mood swings daily. Although bipolar disorder may be manageable,  it cannot be cured. “Hormonal imbalances might trigger or cause bipolar disorder. Environmental factors: abuse, mental stress, a “significant loss,” or some other traumatic event may contribute to or trigger bipolar disorder.” (Nordqvist, 2017)

One solution to help bipolar disorder is therapeutic talking. The option to talk to someone can help with a person’s mental instability tremendously. Or it might not. Some people would prefer to keep their feelings and problems to themselves, although that is not always the best solution. Those people might get annoyed or displeased if their family or friends try pushing them to go to a therapist. Sometimes it is better to let them decide for themselves, unless it starts causing a threat toward their lives, or the lives of others. Talking to a psychiatrist can help immensely, they can help maintain bipolar disorder. Talking with a therapist can provide support and assist a person with different kinds of coping methods that they did not know before. Being bipolar can make a person’s life very problematic and cause them a considerable amount of emotional stress. A lot of people do not understand what goes through a bipolar person’s mind, so talking to a therapist, who is trained to listen and try to understand, can make a big difference.

Another option to ease through bipolar disorder is medication. Certain bipolar medications can make an immense difference in a person’s life. It can help keep their “highs” and “lows” under control. But, it could also have a negative effect on a person, such as blurred vision, dry mouth, drowsiness, muscle spasms or tremors, and weight gain. However, medicine has helped an immeasurable amount.

Another solution to help bipolar disorder is support. Support can go a long way when it is from the people that the person loves and is close to. People that have a mental disability can feel secluded and down about themselves, and they need that support from their family and friends. Not understanding the illness and not knowing how to react during their “lows” is very common, but it is not good to shy away from them. Although they are afraid of asking sometimes, they need help and support. Bipolar disorder is no different than having a physical illness, everyone needs the same kind of love and support during their hard times.  

To conclude, bipolar disorder is an ongoing problem in America today. Bipolar disorder is a mental illness that results in a person having extreme mood swings. It is not curable, but can be maintained. Therapeutic talking, medication, and support from their loved ones can all help with this very unfortunate mental illness. Therapeutic talking can provide people with support, and assist them with different coping methods. Medication can make a tremendous amount of difference in a person’s life. Support from family and friends is very important for anyone with a mental illness, especially bipolar disorder.

https://www.nimh.nih.gov/health/topics/bipolar-disorder/index.shtml

https://www.statisticbrain.com/bipolar-disorder-statistics/

http://www.bipolar-lives.com/bipolar-disorder-facts.html

https://www.medicalnewstoday.com/articles/37010.php

https://www.webmd.com/bipolar-disorder/guide/antipsychotic-medication

Practice Blog

Try to post something here (that is school appropriate) to test the system:

Remember to reply to someone, it is @

For example, @Lenina &5 then post your comment/s

Remember for full points to read all directions, watch spelling, avoid repeating, and use the anonymous posting tool.  You will also have to email me your pretend names so that I can keep you all straight for Power School.

Final Blog: What can we Learn?

Which Can We Learn More From as a Catharsis?

Respond to at least one or more of the following prompts:

*Hamlet and Holden have may tragic things occur?  Which can we as an American people learn more from?  Why?  Compare and contrast both characters.

*How are the minor females in both texts instrumental for what occurs in both texts?  Are females to blame or could any of them have saved our tragic protagonists?

*How does Catcher in the Rye blend with Fitzgerald's survival of war?  How does the same occur in Hamlet?  Does this tell us anything as a society that has often been in war?  Explain.

*Attack any arguments you find to be weak and/or support those claims others do well with.

You will be expected to cover and show a solid reading of Catcher in the Rye for this post.  Repeating segments/quotes may earn only a 6/10 score or lower.

For full credit, you MUST have quotations as support of your points, you MUST show reading and avoid online summary info, you MUST respond to a minimum of 2 posts.  Points will be deducted for those students who wait until the last 12-24 hours, for spelling problems, repeating information already stated, confusing responses, attacking classmates verbally, simply agreeing without saying much of anything, or off-topic commentary.  

------Having support from databases may be given additional credit if used well----

DATABASES ARE NOT REQUIRED FOR THIS BLOG, but your argument will be judged harshly, so be prepared to defend yourself!

**This blog will end at the end of the school day on 12/20.  Remember that starting on the last 12-24 hours prior will result in loss of points since your discussion will be limited.

Whose Fault Is It: Can the literature teach us anything about history?

Whose Fault Is it?  Can this teach us anything about history?

*Argue which character/s from both Oedipus the King and The Great Gatsby caused the most problems for the tragic circumstances. There is not one correct answer, but be prepared to defend using quotes from both texts.

*You may wish to incorporate if characters may be like our own leaders or leaders in history as part of your response.

You may discuss any segment of the play/novel, including the end.

Please take into considering societal, historical, and.or gender roles in your response (or you may have other ideas).  

For full credit, you MUST have quotations as support of your points, you MUST show reading and avoid online summary info, you MUST respond to a minimum of 2 posts.  Points will be deducted for those students who wait until the last 12-24 hours, for spelling problems, repeating information already stated, confusing responses, attacking classmates verbally, simply agreeing without saying much of anything, or off-topic commentary.  

------Having support from databases may be given additional credit if used well----
DATABASES ARE NOT REQUIRED FOR THIS BLOG, but your argument will be judged harshly, so be prepared to defend yourself!

**This blog will end at noon on 11/18.  Remember that starting on the last 12-24 hours prior will result in loss of points since your discussion will be limited.