EXTRA CREDIT BLOG
Read the student drafts (1 and 2) and make useful/helpful commentary to assist a classmate. The more helpful the commentary, the more possibility of full +5 (for post blogs together)
Students who are chosen have been awarded +2 already--no names. Due 1/5/2018 by end of school day.
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or your comments will not receive extra credit.
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Help with:
*organization
*strength of argument
*strength of sources
*usage/integration of assigned reading
*adding sources/databases to help
*wording/vocabulary
*structure of APA
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Student B Draft
CCP English
1st Hour
12/21/17
Catcher in the Rye problem solution
A cool moist substance runs down your face as you are striving to reach your goal you set yourself for failure but to only see yourself succeed in the end this substance you achieved after this hard work is sweat. A problem in todays society is lack of work ethic we need more sweat in our country. The country of america is in a deep hole of lack of work ethic such as how refugees are starting to fill in jobs that americans want but to lazy to work. The problem with this problem today is that if we do not stop this lack of work ethic soon we will have so many people getting money from the government because they will have children and they cannot afford food or schooling for them so that's where a lot of our tax money goes. A good way to help stop lacking in the work ethic area is by a couple of steps such as Communicating better, means to talk to them face to face to make them feel valued. Empower them, let them give you suggestion about how you can improve the company better or what would be more efficient. And Provide incentives, give your workers something they can work for besides just money like if they hit a personal goal they should achieve a gift card or if its a really good goal possibly even a paid day off. In the Book Catcher in the Rye Holden Caulfield has an enormous amount of lacking for work ethic. As Holden attended pencey a big school for really smart kids or smarter than the average bear kind of kids, Holden has the ability to pass all hiss classes possibly even get A’s in all of them but Holden chooses not to do any homework or doesn't get involved in class activities. As Holden continued this path at Pencey he soon was noticed that he had to leave the school because he was failing his classes. How will Holden's parents feel about this? “Well...they’ll be pretty irritated about it. They really will, This is about the fourth school i’ve gone to” (Holden,1946, pg 9). But before holden gets kicked out he had work ethic for other people but not himself such as when stratelator wanted Holden to write a paper for him Holden did. When Holden left Pencey he was very lousy with his money i mean lousy to the point where when Holden ran into someone he recently talked to he would offer them a drink or a hot chocolate. Holden met up with an old friend by the name of Sally she was nice and Beautiful as Holden described her but when Holden went to the ice rink with sally Holden couldn't help but want to tell sally that he loved her. Holden soon told Sally that he wanted to go away with her and live in a cabin and get a job to live together in peace. But Holden would say these things but i dont think actually meaning them. Because Holden never had a job at the moment just thinking ahead.
